Feedback on 1st Music Video draft

• The lip sync is out in 0:32, 0:40, 1:06, so I may shorten shots before the lip syncing or redo the lipsyncing in general.
• I can't use Ken Burns as you can only do it on images and not videos.
• The shot of my grandad needs to be sped up as it's still quite slow.
• I need to amend my statement of intent as I changed some things. 
• https://youtu.be/IBwlJq6qzGA

Production diary post for music video

This evidence that these videos are mine, I filmed on separate days. I used the VHS filter on the young people sections, because in films people used a filter so you would know its a flashback so I've been liking VHS lately so I interpreted that into my work.

I added the fade/dissolve to connote that its a flashback, I did these with the shots with young and old and this transition separates this shots to show the two social groups. Its demonstrates the idea I'm portraying much clearly to the audience.

I added the song title to my Nan typing on the typewriter so its like shes typing the title. The ink of the typewriter died so I had to result into putting it into the video. If I could improve, I wish I could of added a typewriter font but it had limited fonts.

My chosen song is under 3 minutes so at the ending I added the shots and ending the music video with the vinyl spinning without the handle to symbolise that the song finished. I used a shot from a lip syncing video, but I liked the pan from the video so I added it in, also shows that they've finished singing.